T1+Writing

Persuasive Writing

__**Tuesday 5 April 2011**__

__WALT - write an argument using persuasive language features to convince people to visit the Bay of Plenty.__

__**Success Criteria**__

My writing contains an introduction, 3 key arguments and a conclusion I will state and restate my opinion I use a range of language resources and punctuation My paragraphs follow the S E E structure

__**Persuasive writing!**__

Do you have nowhere to go in the holidays? Well i’m going to fix that! I think you should come to the Bay of Plenty because we have Kiwi360 also known as Kiwi fruit country, Rotarua Red woods and Mount Maunganui. If you come to the Bay of Plenty make sure you bring a very big diary, because you will have to write a lot. I am absolutely sure you will have a great time!

Here are my reasons you should come to the Bay of Plenty. First of all you will learn more facts New Zealand. If you come to the Bay of Plenty I can guaranty you will have a great time at the Kiwi360. There is a gift shop or you could find your way through the maze. Adults there is a cafe where you can sit back and relax for a while, and your can kids gobble up there kiwi fruit ice cream, you can also refill your tummies with great food or drink!

After you go there go to the Rotarua red woods where you can ride your bike on loads of different tracks, you could also go on hiking tracks there are so many to chose from. There is a gift shop and a information centre for people visiting from different countries around the world, that want to know a little more about the different tracks and which is the best to chose.

You should come to the Bay of Plenty, because you could walk up Mount Maunganui and see the great views from the top. At the bottom you could buy an ice cream to cool you off. When you are at the top you can see Madakana island it Looks very large from the top of the Mount. You can also see over the whole of Tauranga. It looks spectacular you can see blue water going on forever and ever At the top you can see the waves crashing on the beach as well, see how the surf is. Also you could sky dive off the Mount it will be a experience you will never forget.

Come to the Bay of Plenty and it will be a holiday you will never forget. When you come make sure you visit Kiwi360, Red Woods and Mount Maunganui. You will have the time of your life, and remember bring a very big diary. In the next holidays you get come to the Bay of Plenty!

Nice work Ella. You are making excellent progress with your writing. You have followed the correct structure of argument writing, well done. Great to see you using paragraphs correctly, you now need to focus on linking them e.g. my first reason, secondly, finally, another reason. You have 3 main reasons to visit and state these in your introduction, then restate them in your conclusion. Your use of personal pronouns is fantastic. Now try to use real strong imperatives to really convince me to visit! Overall super effort.

Miss Crone :)